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Vein Apoplectic by *Konjekto:iconKonjekto:



There are sparklers in the back of my throat, and you're just itching to dynamite
this joint.
(A rift of twitches, from an orange twit.)
I'm a fighting last chance, a choke-battered tongue serum
tangerine sweat retained behind a layer of
plastic wrap
and I crinkle whenever you slide into my shiver of a short-leashed field mouse
with dandelion claws stuck in its spinning wheel of a
spine.
(And by dandelion, I mean poppy.)
I always love it when I can slurp up the spasms, and you're the perfect paint thinner
to finish the job.

So load your heat into the barrel of my heart rate
twiddle your toes
and let her rip through my fucking synapse.
©2008-2009 *Konjekto
:iconkonjekto:

Author's Comments

To all my friends who rightfully hate it when I try to display my poetry: Oops. Well, don't read it then.

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:iconnessus-labs:
Looks a lot like some of my literature.

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When it comes to things that move I either want to kill it, have sex with it, or eat it... Sometimes all three, in that order. :D
:iconcinderella2b:
I like it. It's very descriptive!

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If there's nothing nice to say don't say anything at all
-Thumper

If this was true the world would be speechless
:iconpowderedtoastgirl:
Seriously, your friends are douchebags.
You're really very good, I enjoy your style. :)

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All in all, I'd say,
the world is strangling.
-Anne Sexton
:iconkonjekto:
Lies D:!
I guess they wouldn't be upset by my putting it on deviantART, but it's when people try to be "deep" and "meaningful" at inappropriate times in inappropriate places that they-- and I as well-- get kind of annoyed.
Thanks, though. I appreciate your compliments. :]

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And my Dad put his head in to say it was time for dinner and then he wanted to see what was so funny. But we didn't want to say.

Then Dad came over to see and Brad was eating foil.
:iconpowderedtoastgirl:
=p I didn't mean that they're actually douchebags in general, only about being opposed to you posting it here, which, surely, is an appropriate place at any time, and which you say they wouldn't actually be upset about, so I now conclude that they are not douchebags. No offense was meant. :)
I do agree, though, "deep" thoughts in certain situations can be annoying. :)

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All in all, I'd say,
the world is strangling.
-Anne Sexton
:iconxancsia:
I must say that before I even read the poem I loved the title! I also think your almost alliterative use of 't' is really harsh and wonderful.

There are sparklers in the back of my throat, and you're just itching to dynamite
this joint.
(A rift of twitches, from an orange twit.)
I'm a fighting last chance, a choke-battered tongue serum


and also your oxymoronic line at the end, is really clever. You write clever and interesting poetry.

and let her rip through my fucking synapse.

Occasionally your turn of phrase can be a little tough to slog through, but then again so was Milton and he's an absolute genius. ^^; not saying you are close to Milton yet, but keep it up.

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"Reading is not the answer to many questions. Unless it be - how to live..."
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:icontigerstarcatcher:
I had to read this twice because your style is very different from mine, but I liked what I read. The feeling I get from this poem is that you are angry about a recent break up that is still getting to you.

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:iconnessus-labs:
Seriously. It's a lot like my poetry. We should chat more, yo.

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When it comes to things that move I either want to kill it, have sex with it, or eat it... Sometimes all three, in that order. :D

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